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Premium Statement Service by Dr. Robert Edinger

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It will be an honor for me to help you draft your statement. I will focus on your noble, socially responsible, long term goals for the future, your lifetime contribution to the enhancement of our global business community. I believe that a strong case can be made that business is our best hope for addressing the many problems and overcoming the many challenges faced by humanity, everywhere on the globe. Thus, I help you to develop an articulation of your goals that is eloquent, and demonstrates the nobility of your unique cause, your dreams for your future in business. For more than 20 years, I have been assisting applicants to MBA and DBA programs from all over the world. I would be honored to draft a model first paragraph for your Statement as well, in International Business or a related area such as Finance, Accounting, Marketing, Advertising, etc.

Executive MBA Program, Military Officer, Sample 1st Paragraph

I currently have 8 years of military service and serve as an officer in the United States Army. Now that I have completed two lengthy deployments, I have decided to transition into the Reserves and little by little make my military service part-time. If accepted into your world class Executive MBA Program at the University of XXXX, I will be able to fulfill my long term goal of managing civilian business with the US Armed Forces. 

Samples of My Work in Business Administration and Closely Related Areas

The Importance of Socially Responsible Business Practices

At the center of my own interest in business stands the concept of ‘socially responsible’ business practices. Over the course of the last 15 years or so that I have been dedicated full time to drafting personal statements or statements of purpose for admission to programs of advanced study, the importance of business, particularly large corporations, assuming responsibility for their actions and actively promoting community responsibility, even progressive social advancement, has become widely recognized. This is now the new mainstream line of thinking in the business world: what is good for the community, in short, is also good for business. As a result, if I were to help you with your statement for admission to a business program, I would do everything that I could to portray you as someone who would be a highly responsible member of the business community, someone who is highly sensitive to social issues and the importance of the business community giving something back to the broader society.

MBA Hospitality Personal Statement, Chinese Applicant

XXXX University is my first choice among MBA Programs in Hospitality because of the focus of your program, which will allow me to concentrate much of my attention to the subjects of both Hospitality and Real Estate. I feel that I have demonstrated my ability to excel since I have a strong undergraduate background not only in Hospitality and Real Estate but also Accounting, Finance, and Human Resources.

I look forward to contributing to the diversity of your MBA Program at XXXX University as a very hard-working student from China who continuously makes the Dean’s List and lives for discussions of global issues in Tourism and Real Estate Development. I will graduate next month, December of 2016, with my BS in Hospitality Management and I have so far maintained a cumulative GPA of 3.64. Currently enrolled in an Advanced Seminar in Strategic Hospitality Management, I am ready to hit the ground running in your program and give it my all, learning as much as I can about: Hotels and Restaurants, Events Operation and Planning, Casinos, Real Estate Sales, and especially Marketing and Finance.

I feel that I am a strong candidate for your MBA Program not only as a result of having distinguished myself as an undergraduate student but also the fact that I have earned certification in Food Safety, Real Estate, and ServSafe Alcohol. After completing your program, I look forward to working for a major corporation for many years in both the US and China and will eventually make my permanent home in China. Travel stands near the top of my list of favorite things to do and I hope to have the opportunity to travel as part of my professional range of activities as a global MBA. I have already visited numerous cities in the United States – most prominently San Francisco, Los Angeles, Chicago, and NYC - and also went to Spain as part of our Study Abroad Program where I especially enjoyed Barcelona. As a Chinese man, the opportunity to spend significant amounts of time in Japan and Korea also contributed in special ways to the enrichment of my Asian identity and the broadening of my cultural horizons. I see the unique, cutting-edge MBA Program with a focus on Hospitality at XXXX University as the optimal platform for launching a distinguished career in the business of international hospitality and hotel real estate. Seeking the fullest of immersions in the gambit of executive business competencies, professional leadership strategies, and creative thinking skills in business, I look forward to also graduating with a solid foundation in business and professional ethics and corporate social responsibility in the global business environment, along with an advanced sensitivity to hospitality challenges that tend to present themselves as a result of cultural differences.

I have completed several internships in the hospitality sector and worked in many hotels, serving as everything from Guest Room Attendant and Front Desk Manager Assistant to Sales and Marketing and Events Operation, since I have advanced Audio/Video skills that my supervisors were eager to put to good use. These experiences have given me a great opportunity to develop an in-depth familiarity with many facets of hotel operations. I have now been in the United States for eight years and have developed heightened cross-cultural awareness and adaptability at the same to time that I have continued to perfect my communication skills in English.

Participating in many student organizations, including the National Society of Minorities in Hospitality, I served as Event Chair for the Elite League of Hospitality in Asia and also helped out the Penn State Catering Society as Front House Manager Assistant and Treasurer. Raising funds for THON, a student-run philanthropy committed to enhancing the lives of children and families impacted by childhood cancer, was another special highlight.

I thank you for considering my application to what I see as the finest Hospitality and Real Estate MBA Program in the world, at XXXX University.

My Service for Applicants to Business School

I help applicants for admission to advanced degree programs in Business, BBA, MBA & DBA who are striving to live and work in responsible ways, and to help create financially healthy companies in the process, achieving success in ways that respect ethical values, people, communities and the environment. I have helped applicants to business programs from all over the globe, students with special interests in a diverse range of topics, including health care practices, business and professional procedures, new information technologies and environmental issues.

Business & Ethics

As someone with a PHD in Religion and Social Ethics, I have long been most interested with the aspects of corporate governance which fall generally under the category of 'social responsibility'. I am committed to encouraging high quality interdisciplinary scholarship and teaching in practical and professional ethics by educators and practitioners who appreciate the theoretical and practical impacts of their subjects. I seek to promote ethical practices in business and advocate the need for ethics as part of business courses, providing a forum for ethicists to discuss and exchange ideas on teaching, training and consulting in the field of business ethics.

Statements of Excellence for Admission to Graduate School in Business Administration

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My service is highly international and I help applicants from all over the world. With each statement that I draft, I emphasize the strong points of each candidate, especially those unique qualities and experiences that allow you to stand out from the crowd and point to the important contributions that you are uniquely qualified to make to economic development over the long term. In most cases, you need an extremely well written statement in order to be accepted. For this reason, I feel strongly that my service is an excellent investment for you to make in your future.

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